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The Girl With A Life William's 5th Draft (Script 5)

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2 03/31/18

The Girl With A Life William's 4th Draft (Script 4)

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2 03/30/18

Catch A Falling Star William's Original Draft (Script 1)

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2 03/27/18

Training Camp William's 17th Draft (Script 17)

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6 03/09/18

The Girl With A Life William's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

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1 03/04/18

Training Camp William's 16th Draft (Script 16)

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4 02/21/18

Training Camp William's 15th Draft (Script 15)

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6 01/10/18

Training Camp William's 14th Draft (Script 14)

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7 01/08/18

Training Camp William's 13th Draft (Script 13)

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3 01/03/18

Training Camp William's 12th Draft (Script 12)

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3 01/02/18

Training Camp William's 11th Draft (Script 11)

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4 12/31/17

Training Camp William's 10th Draft (Script 10)

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4 12/30/17

Training Camp William's 9th Draft (Script 9)

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3 12/22/17

The Girl With A Life William's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

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2 12/21/17

Training Camp William's 8th Draft (Script 8)

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4 12/20/17

Training Camp William's 7th Draft (Script 7)

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4 12/19/17

Training Camp William's 6th Draft (Script 6)

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4 12/17/17

Training Camp William's 5th Draft (Script 5)

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4 12/15/17

Training Camp William's 4th Draft (Script 4)

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3 12/14/17

Training Camp William's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

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2 12/13/17

Training Camp William's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

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2 12/13/17

Training Camp William's Original Draft (Script 1)

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3 12/12/17

The Girl With A Life William's Original Draft (Script 1)

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2 10/14/17

Reviews William Has Written

REVENGE & VENGEANCE, Curt's Original Draft

4 out of 15 people found the following review helpful:

Crudeness limits audience appeal

Overall Recommendation:
2 stars
 
Premise:
1 stars
 
Story structure:
2 stars
 
Character:
2 stars
 
Dialogue:
2 stars
 
Emotion:
1 stars
 
June 05, 2012
Set a goal. Give the hero a clear goal that he can accomplish at the end. Clearly, the goal here is to move from the Consider List to the Development Slate. Ten thousand dollars to start. To do that, the script has to change. Until you correct some basic flaws, there's no point to the discussion.
Family. A crime story is about family. In this case, showing how life really works inside a cartel with billions of dollars.
Remember that TV shows create cartels based on what they can film in a week, on a set, and not what really is out there. A movie would film in Mexico, a short trip across the border. Easy to research and add reality.
The first script to move from Consider to Develop... worth trying for.

In this current script, the Hero builds on the perception of surgeons being arrogant jerks. A local leers at his wife in an upscale restaurant. The man has five bodyguards. The maitre'd says the man OWNS the resort and the restaurant where they're eating. Any sensible man would take his family out of there. Instead, Josh assaults the man???? .

The James Bond movie "Licence to Kill" comes to mind. Robert Davi as a drug dealer who beats his girlfriend, compelling James Bond to come to her rescue. A plot that temporarily stalled a franchise as popular as James Bond.

It wasn't believable that a British agent would be allowed to stay in the home of a drug lord, or could penetrate the organization so easily. And quickly. It takes YEARS to build enough trust.
The nightmare of drug dealers having billions of dollars violates our sense of moral outrage. Knowing there are too many to kill, that the cartels have hundreds of soldiers waiting to move up in the organization... there wasn't even a sense of the enormous money the cartels handle. Add it.

Here's a place to start: Forbes lists reported head of the Sinaloa cartel in Mexico, ranked 701st on Forbes' yearly report of the wealthiest men alive, and worth an estimated $1 billion, today officially thanked United States politicians for making sure that drugs remain illegal.

According to one of his closest confidants, he said, "I couldn't have gotten so stinking rich without George Bush, George Bush Jr., Ronald Reagan, even El Presidente Obama, none of them have the cajones to stand up to all the big money that wants to keep this stuff illegal. From the bottom of my heart, I want to say, Gracias amigos, I owe my whole empire to you. Look, everyone knows, when you have Prohibition, you create gangsters. And the more you prohibit, the more gangsters you make. El Chapo is hero now to all those slumdogs who want to be millionaires. Kids in the street, when they play games, they all want to be El Chapo, the baddest man in the whole damn town."

Meanwhile, many speculate that rich and prominent Mexican families are in cahoots with American businessmen in the alcohol industry, wealthy industrialists who launder the unprecedented profits from the drug business with their legitimate enterprises, and lawmakers who get gigantic kickbacks and payoffs to make sure that these drugs remain illegal. According to sources on both sides of the border, tens of millions of dollars in payoffs and kickbacks are stashed in Swiss banks every year, blood money from the brutal business made possible by a corrupt system supported by laws that don't, and have never, worked.

as an epidemic of murderous violence rages on the Mexican-US border,, El Chapo is laughing all the way to the bank. "Whoever came up with this whole War on Drugs," one of his lieutenants reports he said, "I would like to kiss him on the lips and shake his hand and buy him dinner with caviar and champagne. The War on Drugs is the greatest thing that ever happened to me, and the day they decide to end that war, will be a sad one for me and all of my closest friends. And if you don't believe me, ask those guys whose heads showed up in the ice chests."

If you can capture the personality of a billionaire drug dealer... absurdist comedy? You wnat to show a man who would cut off the heads of ten Mexican police officers and leave them outside a police station.
 

ZvG: Zombies Vs Gladiators, Norma's 4th Draft

1 out of 17 people found the following review helpful:

Norma is enormously talented

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
September 02, 2011
Norma's script is wonderful. She is our champion.
 

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