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Title Average Rating Downloads Date
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America's Ben Franklin in: The Electrocution String Jason's 1st Draft (Script 39)

No rating
23 01/25/12

About

An engineer by training and profession, a funny-man in my own mind, trying to make it big in TV and movies.
 

Reviews Jason Has Written

I Think My Facebook Friend is Dead, Francisco's Cut

3 out of 3 people found the following review helpful:

Very nice effort, could be better

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
January 09, 2012
This was incredibly well done for a test movie. Clearly a lot of time and resources went into it.

Things I liked:
- Loved the cast. The main characters did a great job.
- Professional feel: nicely-shot, quality sound, nice soundtrack, FX and action good
- Dialog was crisp and natural

Things I think could be improved:
- Could use a comedy punch-up. There were many amusing moments and the light tone (until the end) was fun to watch, but it just seems like it should be funnier.
- Story was very straightforward, could use more depth. Maybe a good subplot or a clear character arc would have helped.
- Another reviewer mentioned needing Facebook (the company) on board with the movie. That makes sense, not sure what's involved there to make it happen.

I'm not sure how this would do as a Hollywood production. It's a nice indie movie as it stands, but it feels like it needs that "something extra" to be successful on a larger scale.
 

Favorite Movies

Wedding Crashers
There's Something About Mary
Hot Tub Time Machine
The Jerk
The Shawshank Redemption
A Few Good Men
 

Influences

Judd Apatow, Adam McKay, and the writers and directors of my list of favorite movies.
 

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