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I live in Blyth, Northumberland, England; 5 minutes from the beach, and 30 minutes from the hills and valleys of the Border country.
I write crime, but, then again, I've written a comedy script. At present, I have a screen play with a major company awaiting a decision. It's the first screenplay I've ever written, or submitted, so, the feedback alone will be worth the time and labour investment.
My collection of short stories, monologue, short scripts, and a poem dedicated to Mr. John Lennon is available at book stores, Amazon, and Kindle. It was written as a tentative step into the world of writers and publishers. The screen play is a result of someone simply mentioning that one of my stories would make a good movie. So, did the research, discovered a programme called Final Draft, and ended up with a first draft of 255 pages; yeah, big headache. Finally got it down to 127 pages.
In the course of my day job (used to be the Consruction Industry), I came across violent criminals, wannabe's, etc. and I guess that is maybe one area of expertise, or a source of info for my writing.

Reviews Revell Has Written

GIDEON'S LAW Video 1 - "Bad Day" Chaotic Version

5 stars
Yep, snappy, fast moving, want to see the rest of it
May 31, 2013

HIT, Chazz's 4th Draft

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Overall Recommendation:
3 stars
3 stars
Story structure:
4 stars
3 stars
2 stars
2 stars
January 19, 2012
First off, it's a cracking plot. Very good twist. I can't rid myself of the feeling that I've come across something like this before, but for all that, really enjoyed the story.

As a film, I think the present script could be balanced better. The 'kick and run' action, for me, became slightly tiresome. I wanted a better interaction between the characters. Sure, there were plenty of 'visuals' (and yes, I know, the script is for a film, and not a radio play), but I still wanted to know more about the characters. Two characters having an interesting conversation that draws the viewer in is still good visual (unless it's a Sky production where the depth of field seems to be as deep as the character's ears - everything else is black blurred screen) Anyway, I digress.

The in-depth-blow-by-blow fight descriptions were a bit much, and, I feel, padded the script out. For example,

RODNEY MEANS (44) is on a gurney, being wheeled through
the hospital. Blood runs down his forehead, spittle from
his mouth.
His white t-shirt is covered in red. Eyes try to hone in
on the ceiling above him, but can’t quite find focus.
He’s moving, moving, in and out of consciousness


RODNEY MEANS (44) is on a guerney, being wheeled through a hospital. His face is a mess, his clothes covered in blood. He drifts in and out of consciousness, unable to focus.

And so it goes throughout the script. Also, the superimposed words of wisdom at the beginning of the different acts. Are they really necessary? The story does not need explaining.

Another example.

As they drive past a restaurant, people jump out of their
chairs, as the car plows through furniture, chairs and
tables bouncing over the aerodynamic car.
Several of the squad cars screech to a halt in the middle
of the intersection, but two of the cars follow Rodney up
onto the sidewalk.
Inside the car, Jones holds tight to the door handle next
to him, watching as furniture bounces off the outside of
the car.


As they drive past a restaurant, they plow through the outside furniture. Pandemonium reigns, as two of the cars follow them.

Just trying to make your job easier, Chaz. Leave the director some input.

Anyway, I hope my few comments are helpful, if not, what the heck, I mean well.

Revell Cornell

America's Ben Franklin in: The Electrocution String Video 1

2 stars
Nah, not really. Voice over. A film should be visual satisfaction. a trailer should be more so - 'the good bits'. If not, read a book.
January 05, 2012

Favorite Movies

Bridges of Madison County, Godfather 1 and 2, Goodfellas, Great Expectations (original version), Sound of Music (yep, that's what I said, Raging Bull, and Pulp Fiction.


John Steinbeck, Martin S, Tim Dorsey, Mario Puzo, Dickens, Shakespeare, Ridley Scott, Tarantino, Lee Child, Guy Ritchie


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