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It takes more than 2 eyes to read a script, you need also a mind-eye to visualize the intentions of the author. I used to read screenplays part-time for a while, but what I got to read was usually so conventional that it took away most of the pleasure to read them. I think that originality is the best quality of a script, all the other things you can fix with a new draft and good editing.

THANKS TO ALL THOSE WHO CONTACTED ME TO COMMENT UPON THEIR SCRIPTS. IT SEEMS THAT THE FEW REVIEWS THAT I'VE PUBLISHED HERE GAINED ME SOME ATTENTION, AND SO I'VE GOT A COMMISSION FOR A DOZEN SCREENPLAYS TO ANALYZE OUTSIDE OF AS.

Good luck everybody with your projects.
 

Reviews Lucy Has Written

TeleRevolution On Air Video 1 - Reflections in a Foggy Night

5 stars
Not really a trailer, it's actually an animated sketch of the first pages of the screenplay. It gives a good impression, I wonder how it would look with real actors in real environments.
May 04, 2013

The Alchemist Agenda Video 6 - Action

4 stars
Good trailer, dynamic and full of action. It works pretty well as a trailer, but does it make me want to see the movie? Not really, it makes it seem a clone of too many similar movies.
January 13, 2012

America's Ben Franklin in: The Electrocution String Video 2 - Semi-serious/comedy

4 stars
The trailer is definitely much better than the screenplay.
January 09, 2012

America's Ben Franklin in: The Electrocution String, Jason's 3rd Draft

12 out of 13 people found the following review helpful:

A paradigm of inanity

Overall Recommendation:
2 stars
 
Premise:
1 stars
 
Story structure:
3 stars
 
Character:
2 stars
 
Dialogue:
2 stars
 
Emotion:
1 stars
 
January 08, 2012
It was a weird experience to read this screenplay, usually I put down works like this after a couple of pages, as soon as the red-lights signaling an overdose of inane foolishness start blinking. But I read this script to the very end, looking for a key to interpret it. At page 114 I found it in the line "This is a farce. You can’t be serious." I think that's the right way to take this script: a rather dumb farce which is not funny, rather costly to make, and totally pointless. Even considering the madness of producing a film like this with a good casting and first-class production values, who would go watch it? Very few people in the USA, nobody at all abroad. I just read that it's getting more and more difficult to lure people into theaters, and I doubt that films based on scripts like this could do that. It makes "Transformers" seem smart by comparison. The most astounding thing about this screenplay is that it won, and I'm not surprised that now Amazon Studios is trying to make it funnier involving the collaboration of other writers. I would be more surprised if someone comes up with the right idea to make this script work: perhaps by casting anthropomorphic animals instead of real actors, with an orang-utang as Franklin and a billy-goat as Washington. Or maybe lookalikes of real contemporary politicians playing their ancestors' caricatures. I don't want to be completely negative, and so I must point out that the pace is quick enough, the flashbacks timely, and the formatting decent.
 

The Nevsky Prospect Video 2 - CG Teaser Trailer, 2.33

4 stars
Atmospheric and teasing, but perhaps too long. And I couldn't hear the audio properly.
January 05, 2012

Antisex Video 1 - Director's original

4 stars
Well shot, lighted and edited. And funny, also. Perhaps it shows too much about the story, I prefer trailers that make you curious to know more, and leave the best material to be discovered later.
January 01, 2012

Favorite Movies

Watchmen, V for Vendetta, Singin' in the Rain, The Truman Show, Citizen Kane, 8 1/2, Matrix, Getaway.
 

Influences

Billy Wilder, Federico Fellini, Howard Hawks, Martin Scorsese, Orson Welles, Sam Peckinpah, David Lynch.
 

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