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Title Average Rating Downloads Date
Created

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 11th Draft (Script 15)

4.0 stars
(4)
159 06/22/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 10th Draft (Script 14)

5.0 stars
(1)
16 06/05/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 9th Draft (Script 13)

No rating
11 06/03/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 8th Draft (Script 12)

No rating
13 05/29/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 7th Draft (Script 11)

5.0 stars
(1)
9 05/24/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 6th Draft (Script 10)

No rating
9 05/19/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 5th Draft (Script 9)

No rating
11 05/13/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 4th Draft (Script 8)

No rating
12 05/07/11

PREMISE WARS Vernon's 3rd Draft (Script 7)

5.0 stars
(1)
12 05/04/11

PREMISE WARS Shaun's 1st Draft (Script 6)

5.0 stars
(3)
12 05/03/11

Pool Shark Shaun's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

5.0 stars
(3)
81 04/22/11

Pool Shark Shaun's Original Draft (Script 1)

5.0 stars
(2)
13 04/21/11

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Reviews Shaun Has Written

The Lost Soldiers, Glenn J.'s Original Draft

3 out of 4 people found the following review helpful:

Extremely clever and well-written

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
4 stars
 
April 29, 2011
s a treat reading this script. I love the premise; sort of a reverse of the prologue of "Timecop" (which was far and away the most interesting part of that movie).

The story of the two brothers, torn apart by war and love, was believable and well done. And I particularly enjoyed the future shock aspect of the whole thing. The scene where the bluebelly shoots the reenactor and is subsequently taken down by the ninja-like SWAT team was particularly effective; I'm not sure if you're aware, but your scene was eerily similar to an incident that occurred during a Gettysburg reenactment in 1996 (ish).

There are some errors in the .RTF file, but these are typical. A quick run through and you should be able to eliminate most of them.

Cain was interesting as he is a departure from the honorable Southern officer that is so typical in films that deal with the war in the east. In the actual screenplay you have him listed as a general. In your synopsis he's a captain. I don't want to knit pick, but I think he's a bit young to be a general, and his command is too independent for him to be a captian. I could be wrong, but I saw him as a regimental commander (a colonel), a rank which would be possible for him to get with the appropriate familial connections (colonelships were frequently bought and sold, esp. early in the war).

I thought it was very effective how you jumped between 3 different time periods. Your writing is crystal clear and what should be difficult to follow you make exceedingly simple.

Great work! There are big things in store for you and this script!
 

DON'T SAY ANYTHING, Terry's 12th Draft

1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Nice work!

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
April 22, 2011
Thanks for sharing this. Stories about high school are always fun to read, and high schoolers meeting gnarly fates is always entertaining for some twisted reason. It was fun to try to guess who the killer was. I had about ten different theories bouncing around in my head.

I really enjoyed reading it, and I was doing so with an extremely critical eye, looking for something I could point out to you.

I saw was an underline error on page 16 (big deal).

Once again, great work.
 

Revelation : The way of the Christ!, Roger's Original Draft

1 out of 2 people found the following review helpful:

Idea had me laughing, but dude, needs a ton of work...

Overall Recommendation:
3 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
1 stars
 
Character:
2 stars
 
Dialogue:
1 stars
 
Emotion:
1 stars
 
April 22, 2011
As the title of the review states, I loved your premise. The image of Christ kicking peoples' asses is hilarious to me, especially if it's done in the over-the-top milieu of 80s/90s fight movies like "Kickboxer" and "Best of the Best."

The major issue is the format. I'm not telling you this out of some slavish adherence to convention, but your work is very hard to read. If you start there, that's half your battle.

I suggest you read some other screenplays, especially professional ones, to get an idea on proper format. People will take you more seriously when this thing's properly written.

I was disappointed that your work wasn't finished. In the future I'd suggest you refrain from submitting incomplete works. I feel cheated (joking).

The period doesn't make sense to me; is it modern day? 33 A.D.? I'm assuming your "Mary" is Mary Magdalene. EDIT - ok, Jesus has returned, but what about Mark and Mary? I guess I'm just a little confused.

If you finish this (and I hope you do), it's going to piss off a lot of people (I’m a Christian, and I still found the idea humorous). What I don't understand is that you include several major faiths; why Islam is not included on the list? If you're ballsy enough to write something like this, you might as well go all the way right?
 

Favorite Movies

"The Exorcist," "Pan's Labyrinth," and "Creepshow"
 

Influences

Stephen King, Lovecraft
 

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