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After 30+ years in the film industry as a Location Manager(IMDB.COM) and watching the Hollywood movie machine, many times, ruin good scripts and waste truckloads of money, I started to wonder why I got into this dog eat dog industry. Now, I have worked with many very talented Directors, Producers, Actors and crew members on some films that I was very pleased with, but in the long run it seems the Studio Executives, Lawyers and Bean Counters always muck up the works. Remembering my college days where a few students went out with some rudimentary video equipment or super-8 cameras and made a nice little film reminded me what I love about film making, and that is the thrill of making a project for the love of it, with no money and scarce resources. Back then film was too expensive to shoot, video equipment was terribly expensive and not so good, so I became a Film Worker instead of being a Film Maker. When I discovered a few years ago that excellent quality HD Video Cameras were pretty inexpensive and I could edit the footage on my Mac, I decided I could be a Film Maker again. I have made a few shorts and music videos while learning the equipment and software, which is a bit of a challenge since when I was growing up computers and digital imaging were non-existent. By the way when I started in the film industry there were no cell phones, email, digital cameras, satellite maps, word processors or much of the equipment we take for granted now. I like the idea of Amazon Studios as it allows anyone to float a script idea, get some feedback and maybe get their script done in the creative culture of peers and professionals that Amazon Studios offers. I have read some very good scripts and a few bad ones, but seeing these brave writers putting their work out there is inspiring. One day I will probably post up a script and look forward to the input, positive or negative, as both help the writer to see the strengths and weaknesses of their project. Thank you fellow creative artists for sharing your ideas and thanks Amazon Studio for creating this venue for independent Film Makers to pursue their dreams.
 

Reviews Alan Has Written

America's Ben Franklin in: The Electrocution String, Jamster's 6th Draft

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This rewrite may need a rewrite.

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
4 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
February 16, 2014
I liked the first version of this script better than this one for some reason. It may be that this time thru there were some glaring problems with the historic realities of some things that I don't think were intended to be part of the great gags concerning Ben Franklin's inventions which are funny and ironic. I will just run down a few references that bothered me. Page 4 there was no medicare or retirement at 65 in Franklin's time. Page 11 Wimbledon Tennis Tournament started in 1877. Page 17 Philly Cheese Steak invented 1930. Page 18 adhesive tape invented 1930 maybe crystal ball could be tied with twine. Page 23 100 dollar bill not printed until the 1800s in fact there was no American national currency at that time. Page 33 red bull product placement reference did not work. Page 99 again Tropicana Orange Juice was not a brand at that time. Page 119 Chocolate bar not invented till 1840s. Perhaps these historic mistakes were an intentional attempt at a funny gag by the writer but they do not work like the fun inventions by Ben like ford thunderbird, speed boat, laser beam which work as we feel Ben was far ahead of his time technologically. One more thing that may need some work is the exchange with General Arnold on pages 14 and 15. Ben seems to already be familiar with Arnold and his history but at end of exchange asks him his name. It is still a great premise and a project with potential for success and sequels but this draft seemed to have lost some of its edge. If not for what I feel are some distracting errors in the historical time line I would have given it 5 stars as I did the last draft I read.
 

Subbin', Pilot Script 1 - That Just Happened

5 stars
Like it and as other reviewers said "don't lose the edge", 2nd draft not as good as 1st.
September 29, 2013

Subbin', Pilot Script 2

4 stars
Very Nice Script, I liked the first draft better than this one. This draft was pretty bland and missing some funny jokes and set ups that the first one had. A great premise don't lose the edge!
September 29, 2013

SEEDS, domonic's Original Draft

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Seeds a script about frankenplants that may need a little fertilizer

Overall Recommendation:
3 stars
 
Premise:
3 stars
 
Story structure:
2 stars
 
Character:
2 stars
 
Dialogue:
2 stars
 
Emotion:
2 stars
 
September 22, 2013
This is one of those scripts that still needs some help to grow and mature. This horrortaculture story is OK but I would have liked the seeds to be some sort of genetically altered plant experiment gone bad to relate to the terrible effects of Monsanto's deadly genetically engineered corn, perhaps related to the early farmers on the farm doing grafting that gets out of hand or mixed with some material from a meteorite. The family that moves back to the farm could be distantly related and have received the property as heirs or at invitation of only survivor the old lady from first incident. Maybe a greedy relative has found some mutant seeds in jar and tries to capitalize on them trying to sell to big corporate farm operation, maybe from Germany. In the end when we think the plant is destroyed it turns out the corporation has saved a specimen. We are left thinking will they revive experiment to try and cash in sometime in future. Frankenplants are very real and very dangerous as Monsanto's engineered corn is showing. This could be a timely commentary on the issue and make a more interesting film. This script needs a little nurturing and it could grow into something delicious.
 

The 70-Year Itch, Andy's Original Draft

1 out of 1 people found the following review helpful:

Wonderful love story, very funny and smart

Overall Recommendation:
5 stars
 
Premise:
5 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
5 stars
 
Dialogue:
5 stars
 
Emotion:
5 stars
 
September 09, 2013
What a great script for a great demographic. The very funny, tight and smart love story of Eli and Evelyn starts out well and gets better. The writer knows how to interweave story lines smoothly as we see Eli and Evelyn suffer thru the 70 year itch. This feel good script will be a great venue for some lucky older actors as there are not many fun senior citizen projects out there. I feel there will be a lot of, not seen lately, A Listers lining up to audition for this one. With the baby boomers hitting retirement age this sweet little romp gives hope for the future as well as touching on the realities of aging. I also feel there will be a lot of older audience members as well as young lining up for this film, especially with great casting and direction. Good luck with this very well crafted script.
 

Thanksgiving Day Parade, Tom's 4th Draft

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This Turducken Will Give You The Runs!

Overall Recommendation:
1 stars
 
Premise:
1 stars
 
Story structure:
1 stars
 
Character:
1 stars
 
Dialogue:
1 stars
 
Emotion:
1 stars
 
September 09, 2013
Pretty awful script for a "total Rewrite" many typographical errors and annoying ignorance of reality such as steam coming from electric subway cars and words that were probably misread by spell-write. It was kind of boring in the beginning and went way long, with little character development and a confusing cast of bad guys. I felt it trivialized some recent real terrorist acts and in general was a waste of time. Was there anything I liked about this script? NO!
 

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