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Scripts

Title Average Rating Downloads Date
Created

Colony Kagiso's 7th Draft (Script 7)

No rating
5 04/20/15

Salmon Kagiso's 4th Draft (Script 4)

No rating
3 02/26/14

Salmon Kagiso's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

No rating
2 02/25/14

Salmon Kagiso's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
3 02/16/14

Salmon Kagiso's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
2 02/15/14

Colony Kagiso's 6th Draft (Script 6)

No rating
9 10/19/13

Colony Kagiso's 5th Draft (Script 5)

No rating
4 10/17/13

THE GOD CURRENCY Kagiso's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

No rating
1 02/24/13

THE GOD CURRENCY Kagiso's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
- 01/15/13

THE GOD CURRENCY Kagiso's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
- 12/28/12

Colony Kagiso's 4th Draft (Script 4)

No rating
7 11/09/12

Colony Kagiso's 3rd Draft (Script 3)

4.0 stars
(1)
9 10/22/12

Colony Kagiso's 2nd Draft (Script 2)

No rating
2 10/07/12

Colony Kagiso's Original Draft (Script 1)

No rating
4 09/13/12

Storyboards

Title Views Date
Created

Salmon Kagiso's The Sales Team (Part 2) (Storyboard 6)

53 02/26/14

Salmon Kagiso's His Heart (Storyboard 5)

52 02/24/14

Salmon Kagiso's His Heart of Hearts (Storyboard 4)

34 02/22/14

Salmon Kagiso's The Sales Team (Storyboard 3)

38 02/20/14

Salmon Kagiso's A Renaissance Man Headhunted (Storyboard 2)

19 02/19/14

Salmon Kagiso's A Renaissance Man at Work (Storyboard 1)

18 02/18/14

Colony Kagiso's Big Business 2 (Storyboard 4)

100 01/26/14

Colony Kagiso's Lust and Her Casualties 2 (Storyboard 3)

52 01/26/14

Colony Kagiso's Big Business. (Storyboard 2)

35 01/24/14

Colony Kagiso's Lust and Her Casualties. (Storyboard 1)

61 01/17/14

About

I studied at The University of Pretoria in South Africa. My BIS (Bachelor in Information Science) Publishing course allowed me to have English as an elected module for three years. I have completed a Communications internship.
 

Reviews Kagiso Has Written

Taletown, Jarvis's Original Draft

1 out of 1 people found the following review helpful:

The Edgy "Hoodwinked"

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
5 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
3 stars
 
Emotion:
2 stars
 
November 08, 2012
Reading the screenplay one can’t help but realise the eclectic influences that make this screenplay work. For instance, while being reminiscent of a movie such as “Hoodwinked” at one point it ends up even alluding to a real conspiracy theory. The fact that it does not shy away from hard hitting aspects such as chronic illness or blood and gore though, shows that it intends to be taken more seriously. It is very daring of the writers to combine characters from such a juvenile world and combine them with such an adult world.

The question is then, is this a successful combination? Can this screenplay be taken seriously? It takes some time to adjust to the combination as a reader but as with any good anime for example, the cartoon presentation juxtaposed with hard-knock subject matter is something one learns to accept. With good story, presentation becomes secondary soon enough and that’s what happens here.

Another form of representation used extensively in the script is the metaphor. Concerning the running metaphor or analogy about the parallels of chess and law, it seemed as though a lot more could have been done. The analogy was off to a good start, much like the trial, but in the end was a bit of a let-down. Hammilton’s ending statement should perhaps be more captivating. With such good foundation in both these instances, it is mainly just a matter of elaborating to fix the problem.

Structurally, the script is near flawless. The brevity that comes with the writing style makes it very easy to follow what is going on at each stage of the script. It is also easily to follow because the writers seem to have aimed to maintain brevity while at the same time giving just enough jargon to keep subject-specific details accurate.

In conclusion, this screenplay is not to be overlooked. It is quite daring in its efforts to deliver entertainment value that is intelligible despite how playful it may seem.
 

A SWEET EDUCATION, Aly's 2nd Draft

1 out of 1 people found the following review helpful:

Sour Smell of Success

Overall Recommendation:
4 stars
 
Premise:
4 stars
 
Story structure:
4 stars
 
Character:
4 stars
 
Dialogue:
3 stars
 
Emotion:
3 stars
 
November 01, 2012
Until one is done reading through the premise, there are flashes in the mind of presumably similar stories. These are stories such as Dangerous Minds, Renaissance Man, Coach Carter and several more. That is, the stories of the out-of-place teacher who becomes a saviour to dysfunctional pupils, often in a similarly dysfunctional environment. However, once the reader is finished skimming through, s/he understands that there’s an edgy twist here that the abovementioned films all shy away from. We are not given a clear indication of exactly what the main character will do to achieve this edginess, but we know it will be "deadly". This keeps the reader engrossed. The process happens organically and does indeed push boundaries.

Another element which comes across as organic is the dialogue. It is appropriately naturalistic considering the high school context. For instance, the kids often make use of typical sexual remarks that one would naturally expect from out-of-control, teenage pupils to their teacher. With this said, the problem is, because it’s so typical of what real kids like these would say, and because they talk so often in this way (in the beginning), the sexual comments can come off as a “running gag” that can get old sometimes. This is so particularly when they swear at the teacher. When toned down though (especially amongst each other), it can be a bit humorous and even charming. This is most likely because there’s more room for charm when they aren’t necessarily on the attack all the time.

The story development has a nice and steady pace to it and yet it can be thrilling. Before the reader even knows it s/he is witnessing the making of a “terrorist” and awaiting a verdict. Usually in a script of this subject matter, the protagonist is not much more than just that, a protagonist. The character arcs here allows for more layering. The teachers, Laurence and Louisa, go beyond being the saviours. There is a reversal whereby these two teachers are the volatile ones while the meek pupils are at their mercy. This challenges the reader positively because throughout the script s/he will often have to keep up with where the dysfunction lies.

Almost all characters’ motives are rooted in something substantial e.g. wise words of a father, in the case of our protagonist. There seems to be a lack of motivation for the vagary of The Head Teacher’s stance on corporal punishment though. As macabre as the journey to the “end” is, it may be a bit difficult to justify to the reader why the Head Teacher is as complacent as she is with the new rules. Even though the new corporal punishment system is compulsory, it does not seem to justify why she would not feel beyond frustrated about the fact that she has to comply. More time may need to be invested into motivating why she was so strongly against corporal punishment, only to end up being a complacent administrator of violence a year later.

In conclusion, this script defies expectations set by films that tackle the same context. Holistically it builds up very well and has a structure that justifies every scene and it’s placement in making up the plot. Perceived flaws mentioned here are just meant to be seen as advice to be used to simply fine-tune an already great script.
 

Favorite Movies

Ocean's trilogy, Social Network, August, Rock 'n Rolla, Lord of War, Exam, The Rocky franchise, The Reneissance Man, The Brothers Bloom, The Fast and the Furious franchise, The Matrix franchise, The Bourne franchise and Clerks franchise.
 

Influences

When I was younger I was influenced by Syllvester Stallone as both an actor and filmmaker. Nowadays I see Guy Ritchie and Aaron Sorkin as the best screenwriters I know and Eric Niccol the best director.
 

Following

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